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my first time by unattached by ~TAKE-a-SHOT:iconTAKE-a-SHOT:

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the wisest of fools
i went off to become
the manliest man
and put some hair on my chest

i arrived at the school
with love from my mum
and some cash in my hand
one hundred and fifty at best.

the older boys took it
and soon dissappeared
the girls thanked me and hugged me
and some of them cheered.

an hour or two passed
and so, their return
with liquor in hand
they told me i'd learn

an ounce and a half at a time
burned on the inside,
all the way down
that is, until nine or ten.

everything felt just fine
that is, until i stood
at which point i hit the ground.
i've been plastered ever since then.
©2003-2009 ~TAKE-a-SHOT
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Author's Comments

this is the story of the first time i got drunk. i was a sophomore (greek - wise fool) in high school and i was visiting my brother at college. he took all my money and bough liquor. i got very very drunk. that is how it all began. ah the good old days.

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~Batman2oo8 Jan 1, 2004, 10:52:36 AM
?nice:batman:

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`lemontea Jan 14, 2004, 7:01:34 PM
Make it into a sonnet some time :D Excellent poem :)

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~TAKE-a-SHOT Jan 14, 2004, 8:11:44 PM
haha i dont know what a sonnet is.

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`lemontea Jan 15, 2004, 3:11:01 PM
here's how to do a sonnet. Every other line rhymes. Simple, no? Theres 14 lines, 3 groups of 4 lines, 1 group of 2 lines.

EXAMPLE from lemonteas poem deposit:

Today my mom didn't buy me my pokemon cards
I knew she only wanted my harm
It was all too much to take -- breaking some glass into shards,
I slit my wrists and rammed them hard into my arm.

Mom never knew how emotionally deprived I was
Everything hurt so much without my happy pills
My hand in the blender making a grinding buzz,
I knew at least my daddy could pay the medical bills

Serious about my death wish I was not
I saw my gaping wound and uploaded a picture to Deviant ART
Wanting attention my whole life, I still never got
Bleeding to death and falling into blackness, I really wasn't all that smart

I should have just stopped pretending
Now even mommy and daddy's money won't help a doctor's mending.

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_//LEMONTEA||MORE.ADDICTIVE.THAN.HEROIN_+''
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~TAKE-a-SHOT Jan 15, 2004, 6:10:37 PM
oooo cool. i could do that. yay

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~kaelielyse Jan 30, 2004, 7:04:54 PM
good times good times.. i started way earlier than that, im a sophomore in high school right now.. fun stuff fun stuff :p

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-+-August 8th, 2003-+-
ich liebe für immer amy
sometimes it's hard to breathe
just knowing u found me
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~wirip Feb 2, 2004, 10:50:49 PM
the name..
The graphics..

you're obsessed with alcohol...

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~TAKE-a-SHOT Feb 3, 2004, 4:32:30 PM
yes... hence my creation of this club. haha. get it now?

:drunk:

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